Problem: The last paragraph does not
make the meaning of the experience clear.
Solution: Revise to include a general statement
about the larger meaning of the experience.
Example: After the broadcast, Paul turned
to me and said, “The first time is always
the worst. The easiest way to calm your
nerves is to make sure you know what
you’re going to say.” Those are words to
live by, and there’s nothing like a public
failure to burn good advice into your brain