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Nowadays , Smoking is considered as a worldwide phenomenon . Also , people refer smoking as slow death and it steals years of a person's life , which is really horrible and they should be aware of the consequences . So , Smoking should be banned , because it affect the environment badly as well as their health .
Firstly, Smoking should be banned , because it harms the environment . For example , air pollution is one of the causes that would definitely affect the environment . The sky would be unclean and polluted from the cigarette smokes and , it will impact people's life , including non-smokers . After that , It will put them in difficult positions . For example : they will have to wear masks to cover their mouths whenever they pass by a smoker . Another example , they have to avoid certain places . Such as , public places like markets and streets . So , Smokers will force people to be indoors instead of outdoors .
Secondly , Smoking is dangerous , it affect people's health negatively , simply because of the numerous cigarettes that a person smokes per day . For instance , when a person smokes full bucket in one day , he or she would definitely suffers from health issues such as unusual coughing , difficulty in swallowing . Also , there are different types of diseases that could be resulted from smoking . One of them is could be fast like lung cancer and the other type could be slow that will show up after twenty years or more . For Example , livers will shut down and won't function normally , as well as the teeth will turn into bad shape with black and yellow stains all over the teeth . Eventually , they will die if they didn't take the precautions from the beginning .
On the other hand , smoking can be useful to put a person into ease , specially when a person is feeling overwhelmed over work and needs to let the stress out . For example , when a person works in long shift hours , smoking a cigarette could be the only way out through out the day . It might help for a short period of time . However , the pleasure that comes out from smoking one cigarette into another will bite her or him on the back in the near future and they have to be responsible for their own actions .
In conclusion , Smoking should be prohibited , at least some of the places where families gather around like park . So , People should be aware of the outcomes . Also , I advise smokers to quit as soon as possible before its too late .
Hello everyone ! Here's my essay , and I need feedback and any improvement tips that I have to know that would be great Thank you . Nowadays , Smoking is considered as a worldwide phenomenon . Also , people refer smoking as slow death and it steals years of a person's life , which is really horrible and they should be aware of the consequences . So , Smoking should be banned , because it affect the environment badly as well as their health .Firstly, Smoking should be banned , because it harms the environment . For example , air pollution is one of the causes that would definitely affect the environment . The sky would be unclean and polluted from the cigarette smokes and , it will impact people's life , including non-smokers . After that , It will put them in difficult positions . For example : they will have to wear masks to cover their mouths whenever they pass by a smoker . Another example , they have to avoid certain places . Such as , public places like markets and streets . So , Smokers will force people to be indoors instead of outdoors .Secondly , Smoking is dangerous , it affect people's health negatively , simply because of the numerous cigarettes that a person smokes per day . For instance , when a person smokes full bucket in one day , he or she would definitely suffers from health issues such as unusual coughing , difficulty in swallowing . Also , there are different types of diseases that could be resulted from smoking . One of them is could be fast like lung cancer and the other type could be slow that will show up after twenty years or more . For Example , livers will shut down and won't function normally , as well as the teeth will turn into bad shape with black and yellow stains all over the teeth . Eventually , they will die if they didn't take the precautions from the beginning .On the other hand , smoking can be useful to put a person into ease , specially when a person is feeling overwhelmed over work and needs to let the stress out . For example , when a person works in long shift hours , smoking a cigarette could be the only way out through out the day . It might help for a short period of time . However , the pleasure that comes out from smoking one cigarette into another will bite her or him on the back in the near future and they have to be responsible for their own actions .In conclusion , Smoking should be prohibited , at least some of the places where families gather around like park . So , People should be aware of the outcomes . Also , I advise smokers to quit as soon as possible before its too late .
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