I hate to see them go away, but maybe there's another way of making the presentation equally
impressive.
2) Lets have the Luz mech's Blaster weapon (mech sized cannon rifle) viewable.
3) The Head of the Luz mech also needs its four sensor whiskers.
4) Love how Aspen sits in her cockpit and the expression on her face. Lets have some wires
and tubes connect to her helmet and chest unit so she "plugs in" Some hanging monitors in
the cockpit would be nice with some hanging wires.
5) Aspen has been beaten up in the crash so lets give her some rips and scuffs to her clothing.
6) We need to see a size comparison between Aspen and the Mech to show its not a suit of personal
body armor but a building sized battle robot. i think we can accomplish on page 1 cell 3, with Aspen's
silhouette visible while we're getting a first front view to the mech. Also adding a ladder to access
the cockpit would add a lot of size comparison (and add connect to the later page when Aspen ascends
into the robot).
7) Rebreather noted from the last email