Quite good I think. I respect your opinions because it will also lead you to improve your written works finally.
Although I feel that the feedback of Peer1(in Task1) is not the best feedback. I accept that it may be useful for improving your written works or assignments in this course. But I would like to explain the reasons that the feedback does not follow the good standard of the constructive criticism. The styles of feedback, it contains rather short and strong comments. According to the “Constructive Criticism”(by Paul Davis), this feedback does not follow many keys of the constructive criticism, such as, (1)consider and care for your feelings before endeavoring to criticize you, (2)acknowledge your strengths and accomplishments before plunging into recognizing your weaknesses, build you up as a person first before pointing out flaws and dangers, and (3)commit to you over the long term as you endeavor to improve and make necessary adjustments.
Another point, that feedback has told you about the points you need to improve your work. So I would like to help you review the points that you have to improve your written work, such as,
-your essay was full of grammatical mistakes,
-there were tenses and spelling problems, and
-some words/phrases are not easy to understand.
Finally, I would like to tell that there are no mistakes about the language usage in this task of your work. I’m glad that you have positive motivationa to learn from your mistakes and keep on doing better. So I’m sure your English will be better soon.
Quite good I think. I respect your opinions because it will also lead you to improve your written works finally.
Although I feel that the feedback of Peer1(in Task1) is not the best feedback. I accept that it may be useful for improving your written works or assignments in this course. But I would like to explain the reasons that the feedback does not follow the good standard of the constructive criticism. The styles of feedback, it contains rather short and strong comments. According to the “Constructive Criticism”(by Paul Davis), this feedback does not follow many keys of the constructive criticism, such as, (1)consider and care for your feelings before endeavoring to criticize you, (2)acknowledge your strengths and accomplishments before plunging into recognizing your weaknesses, build you up as a person first before pointing out flaws and dangers, and (3)commit to you over the long term as you endeavor to improve and make necessary adjustments.
Another point, that feedback has told you about the points you need to improve your work. So I would like to help you review the points that you have to improve your written work, such as,
-your essay was full of grammatical mistakes,
-there were tenses and spelling problems, and
-some words/phrases are not easy to understand.
Finally, I would like to tell that there are no mistakes about the language usage in this task of your work. I’m glad that you have positive motivationa to learn from your mistakes and keep on doing better. So I’m sure your English will be better soon.
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