o Paraphrasing: You have shown great effort in paraphrasing by employing a variety of paraphrasing techniques, especially structural change, making your writing unique and original.
o Organization: Your summary is quite organized and coherent with excellent use of transitions. Most ideas are also well-connected, which makes your writing logical. Meanwhile, since you’ve missed one main idea, the only flaw is that its supporting ideas could be more logically connected with their key point as stated in the outline. Adding a topic sentence is recommended.
o Grammar: Your writing shows excellent language use with a variety of sentence structures and appropriate word choices. Study relative clauses and participial phrases to improve your writing style.