Adisorn,
Thanks for your time on Friday. It was really exciting to see my first 'First Proof’!
I thoroughly reviewed it yesterday and have the following general comments:
1) PHOTOS - I noted your remark on the fact that there are too many pictures and tried to delete quite a few from each article generally based on their poor quality or lack of relevance. Consequently, there is quite a lot of reshuffling to do with respect to photo lay out and corrections to do with respect to photo numbering. I marked the latter in the various articles.
2) HEADINGS - The headings shown in the Contents - namely: Feature Articles, NMV in Action, and NMV Upcoming Activities (I deleted "and Events") - need to appear in the body of the magazine. I've indicated where in the first proof.
3) COLOUR OF PAGES - I prefer all pages white except for:
- Farewell Louise p 2 and 3 - The colour suits the article very well;
- Kammavaca p 14 and 15 - The burgundy matches the photos superbly;
- The Buddha of the Future p 16 to 19 - The beige pages are just right here.
4) END MARK - I'd like to add an end mark at the end of each article. Shall we use the logo of the NMV or the little flower used in issue No.8 (Jan - 2016)? I would prefer the NMV logo.
5) END NOTES - If there are end notes in an article (people often call them footnotes except that end notes are printed at the end of the article and not at the end of the page on which they appear), the little 1 above the world has to show in the text. I corrected this in the articles where relevant.
6) CAPTIONS OF PHOTOS - On most pages, when captions are embedded in photos, they are not readable, especially if they are in dark red. (See p 9.) I'd prefer that, wherever possible, the caption is not embedded in the photo but indicated just below the photo as on page 8. When not possible, then white colour or another very visible colour depending on the picture must be used.
That's about it for general comments.
I will now be sending a few e-mails addressing chronologically the first proof where special comments need to supplement the corrections I made directly on it or where new pictures need to be sent.
The first proof will be available for your courier to pick up tomorrow from 8am at the Reception of Tower A of The River.
The NMV president will want to see the updated version you will provide me with on Friday 10th. So, it would be convenient if you would have 2 copies printed next Friday, one for her and one for me. We'd review it over the week end. Then I' d revert to you on Monday 12th, which leaves the 13th for any changes to be made, and printing could start on the 14th - as we discussed.
In the meantime, please do not hesitate to text or call if anything is unclear. I'll ensure I carry my first proof with me at all times! (Or I can sit with your team if it is easier for them at this early stage. There are many, many changes/corrections and I have no problem taking the time to go over them. Let me know if it is needed.)