Have you ever wanted something but you have never get to it? (SS) I believe that money is important thing to make not only your dream but also other’s dream come true. (RP) Money can do many thing and make your life happier. (DCS) So, that is why people should do everything to get money. (EP)
Nowadays, money can buy anything that you want. (SS) For example, you can buy mobile phone for convenient communication. (SS) Furthermore, you can buy dream house for the rest of your life. (C/PMA) Moreover, you can buy car to save time in your life or you can buy clothes to build up your confidence.(DCS) Also, you can buy food which human body needs nutrient to help your body can work efficiently. (C/PMA) Then, you would take your abilities to exchange with salary. (IPS-1) Money can buy not only everything but also it can buy life span. For instance, patients who are cancer need to treat by hiring doctor. (C/PMA) So, it have to spend a lot of expense. (IPS-1)
In the same way, money can help other people from difficulty. (IPS-4) For example, you can give scholarship to student, who have short hair, does not have educational opportunity. (NRP) So, they can use knowledge to improve their skill and they can have a chance to have a good life. (DCS) Furthermore, you also can donate to people who are malnutrition or homeless to improve their living quality. (C/PMA) Because of money from donation, they might use the money to survive by themselves. (SC/DC/COMMA/MC)
However, worth of money is not good at the time. (C/PMA) You might get some problem such as difficulty to get someone who act honestly with you. (EP) Because most of people might think of how they get benefits from you, they might act for benefits without honesty. (SC/DC/COMMA/MC) Moreover, you have to stay strong with who come to get benefits from you. (C/PMA) I suggest you to ignore people who act as want only benefits from you. (RP)
People who have money are probably net good. (EP) They can be obsessed by earning money to make them comfortable. Although, they might forget that the money cannot hug everything in their life. (C/PMA) They spend lots of time to their job to get more money meanwhile they have no time to spend with their family. (RP) It’s like money can buy the object to fulfill oneself. On the other hand, it can make you losing some at the happiness at the same time. (IPL-5)
In conclusion, money is the major factor to get convenient living. (IPS-2) Even it has some disadvantages. However, they also have a lot of advantages. (SC/DC/COMMA/MC) Money can take us living faster, longer, and better, and it also can give opportunities to others.(SCR-predicate)