5500 111 Experiential English I Sci 40 Mona Yalong (Mona) 583 33388 23 Teacher’s comment: Very well-written throughout the essay and interesting story of your role model! Your writing shows original effort in doing the task. Impressive! Your writing is logical, well-organized, and coherent with excellent use of connectors and transitions. Your writing shows excellent language use with a variety of sentence structures and appropriate word choices. Your writing contains a few major and minor grammatical errors. Check verb form (tense), punctuation, and s-v agreement. Your writing contains a few major and minor grammatical errors.