Thanks for the writing Champ! There is some organization there even if you get
carried away talking about the ways to get there when it might have been better to
stick to telling the reader about Hua Hin the place. It might have been better with
more ideas, but your writing is better. Try to expand a little. Check through and note
the errors. Let me know if your don’t understand anything
So you are doing well and I am very happy so far. Let’s try another three question
writing.