- Your motivation is not clear. You previously mention your character traits but do not mention any interest in neurosurgery anywhere in the essay. You need to build up to this point.
- Pointers: Explain why you developed an interest in neurosurgery, specifically the separation of siamese twins. Were you formerly a siamese twin? What factors motivated this interest in you? When did you first learn of Dr. Carson's work and how did this further influence your desire to enter the field of microbiology? More importantly, Did you go to medical school? Where? When did you graduate? Did you train at other facilities where your interest was further developed? What is your field of expertise? Are you a certified doctor in your country?