Quite good I think. The answers were well put together, and the ideas were
logical, clear, and easy to follow. You made some good points and I agree with
most of them. I liked the way you provided evidence to support your main point.
Most of the ideas were good, but I think the last point you made needs to be
supported with better evidence. I think your essay would have been more
complete if you had added a conclusion at the end. Better proofreading was also
needed to help improve your work as there were still some careless mistakes—
spelling, grammar, and punctuation. I look forward to reading your work again.