To all supervisors:
All performance appraisals are due by Nov. 15. If you have any
questions about how to fill out the forms or do the in-person
component of the appraisal, you should read the FAQ section
on the company intranet.
Amanda, ext. xxxx
Which word or words would you identify as boring? What synonyms
can you list? Revise the E-mail to add some excitement.
Amanda said, “I decided to see if I could replace three words and
phrases: fill out, do, and read. I went to the word-finder tool on my computer
and came up with what I think were terrific replacements for them.
It’s amazing to me how simply changing a couple of words results in such
improvement. And it was easy to do!”
Here’s Amanda’s revised E-mail:
To all supervisors:
All performance appraisals are due by Nov. 15. If you have
any questions about how to complete the forms or conduct the